A Happy Ending

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)"/> Hello! This is the first critique I ever made on deviantART. So it's something special, and I hope it's useful to you! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)"/>
So let's start!


First something about the distribution of the stars:

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt="" title="Bullet; Black"/> I gave 5 stars for vison because the image is scanned clearly, there are no earaser marks left and it has a focus and it's balanced. (there is no big place left in white)

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt="" title="Bullet; Black"/> I gave 3 and a half points to originality, because kissing is a very popular topic. But I liked the glasses and their embrace very much!

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt="" title="Bullet; Black"/> I gave 3 and a half stars to technique, too. But 3.75 would be better, because I was drawing off one star because of the clothing and hair and a forth of a star because Becketts little finger is too short.
Please notice, that the shading of this image is really great, but the outlines are sometimes not so good exspecially her arm and the haircut. But as I sad, your shading is very good!

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt="" title="Bullet; Black"/> I gave only three stars to impact -.- please don't kill me now, but I had to look twice before I saw Beckett in the picture. I love realistic drawings but his eyebrows and his face is a way to female.
I think that is the weakest point of the painting, but none the less I like it very much, because it is 'moving', and good emotinal moving pictures are very rare. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/>

I hope my English is understandable so far.


Now I want to add my personal opinion about this picture in general and in detail. (I'll try not to repeat anything I said before.)

My first expression, after I realized, that this is Beckett was: Who the hell is this girl?
Well it's clearly up to you who appears next to him, but a another character from VtMB would have had more impact on the watchers.
Maybe damsel or another lady of easy virtue like Janette or Velvet Velour.
What I really liked the most were those glasses! I love those glasses of Beckett, because they fitting to him very well, and it's one of his main characteristics!
I also liked the fact, that this is a pencil drawing without color or anything else, just pencil and paper. Hell, I love those drawings, because they remind me of black and white movies, and this is fitting very well to the vampire image and it makes a great dreamlike atmosphere.


<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)"/> So my final result is: <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)"/>

I'm leaving 15 out of 20 possible stars.

+++ some hearts (out of 1 to 12 hearts (12 is the best; at which every heart is standing for something I liked), well count it yourself! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/w/w…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Wink)"/>

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/> <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/> <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/> <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/> <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/> <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/> <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/>

I hope my critique is useful to you. Thank you very much, for your great painting! yours LilithNoEve